I enjoyed Andrea's profile, but it led to several intriguing questions. First, I wanted to know who else is a part of Lisa's life, besides her daughter of course. She must have had friends before she was unable to work. Where are they; have they abandoned her as a result of her condition? Also - falling out with her sister? Living homeless with a daughter in tow? There's a lot of rich information here, a million stories to delve into. I know that's difficult, especially considering the 1,000 word limit, but it feels like this profile is barely scratching the surface of something deeper, greater.
I appreciate the quotes; I feel that they're well placed. I really like the primary focus, that Lisa has a masters degree but is unable to work. She has fallen incredibly far, and now her daughter is conflicted. Interesting. Very interesting. I look forward to reading the final draft.
Yes! You bring up a lot of things that I had questions about too, but didn't put in my response. The age thing, for example, as well as the falling out with the sister (which is interesting, but I'm not sure it needs to be mentioned because it leads to something else altogether that she probably can't explore in this short of a piece). I hadn't thought about other people in her life, but you're right--the way the profile reads, it kind of appears that it's just the two of them, and they only talk to and have each other.
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