Response to Steven's Profile

In general, I like the pacing of this piece - it keeps the reader moving through the story - but there are several things I'm confused about/unaware of. Is the piece about Evelyn or the Posse organization. If it was about the organization, then I feel more details should be supplied about the posse's themselves. If it was about Evelyn and her experiences, then why come back to the concept of the posse in the final paragraph.

Perhaps a clearer focus would help me tune in to the heart of the story.